Saturday, April 2, 2011

Epic Contest! I'm using the word EPIC here!

You must check this out.

One Twitter-sized pitch wins a full manuscript request from THE Suzie Townsend.

Here's mine. Get out the red pen and rip it to shreds!


Kat escapes death by agreeing to steal Banner’s memories of the afterlife. But he’s on a mission to gain her secrets. He wants her soul.

Get yours ready, and thanks for any feedback!
-Marie

10 comments:

Cheree said...

Love the pitch. It's a fantastic contest. Good luck in it.

Nicki Elson said...

That is so cool!

M.J. Fifield said...

I'm new to the whole write a pitch thing so I may not be entirely qualified to critique this. That said, I think the story sounds cool however the pitch itself seems choppy when read aloud. I would maybe try and find a way to merge the last two sentences into one. "But he has a mission of his own: to steal her secrets--and her soul."

Best of luck in the contest!!


M.J. Fifield
My Pet Blog

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Yamile said...

I agree with MJ. It does sound a little choppy. Try to smooth it out and it should give you more room for extra details. But your premise sounds great!

Murees Dupé said...

I rather like your pitch. I would read this book.

Escape Artist said...

Hey no prob on the ramp up. I had so much fun. Seriously though, I was very interested myself, but I got a critique happening with Authoress. One shouldn't be greedy!!
If you're interested in getting your work critiqued and returning the favour, let me know!
Good luck.
Whoops. Almost forgot. Nice 140 pitch!
Good work!

Alleged Author said...

That IS a great contest. Much luck!

Marie Rearden said...

Thanks for the advice! I just posted my entry. We'll see what happens. :)

Marie

Roland D. Yeomans said...

Suggestion : instead of giving us Banner's proper name, instead give us his identity : fallen angel, unfallen angel, death's kid brother :

Kat escapes death by agreeing to steal the memories of the Gatekeeper to Heaven. But he's on a mission of his own : he wants her soul.

Something like that. I wish you great luck in this contest. My luck at these these contests is a thing of ill omens! LOL.